<div>I hope I'm not reading an old version of landing page but I have some suggestions, as always :b </div><div><br></div>On the main Neurobureau page, the first sentence seems incomplete...<div><br></div><div><meta charset="utf-8"><span class="Apple-style-span" style="font-family: HoeflerText-Regular, 'Hoefler Text', 'Times New Roman', serif; font-size: 14px; line-height: 17px; -webkit-text-size-adjust: none; "><a title="http://neurobureau.projects.nitrc.org" href="http://neurobureau.projects.nitrc.org/" style="color: rgb(173, 123, 18); text-decoration: none; ">The Neuro Bureau</a> is a forum and collaborative initiative that supports "open neuroscience" — embracing the concepts data, methods, and ideas sharing. </span></div>
<div><font class="Apple-style-span" face="HoeflerText-Regular, 'Hoefler Text', 'Times New Roman', serif"><span class="Apple-style-span" style="font-size: 14px; line-height: 17px; -webkit-text-size-adjust: none;"><br>
</span></font></div><div>Do you mean something like:</div><div><br></div><div><meta charset="utf-8"><span class="Apple-style-span" style="font-family: HoeflerText-Regular, 'Hoefler Text', 'Times New Roman', serif; font-size: 14px; line-height: 17px; -webkit-text-size-adjust: none; "><a title="http://neurobureau.projects.nitrc.org" href="http://neurobureau.projects.nitrc.org/" style="color: rgb(173, 123, 18); text-decoration: none; ">The Neuro Bureau</a> is a forum and collaborative initiative that supports "open neuroscience" — embracing the idea that data, methods, and ideas can be freely shared within the community.</span></div>
<div><meta charset="utf-8">(I tried to reword it with "concepts" still in there but couldn't get it to work). Maybe you don't need the "within the community" part.</div><div><br></div><div>I think the next sentence needs to change a bit too:</div>
<div><meta charset="utf-8"><span class="Apple-style-span" style="font-family: HoeflerText-Regular, 'Hoefler Text', 'Times New Roman', serif; font-size: 14px; line-height: 17px; -webkit-text-size-adjust: none; ">Translating the <b>ethos of open neuroscience</b> into action is an exciting challenge to the way we <b>currently</b> work and publish. </span></div>
<div>[replace "often" with currently. If you think that's too strong maybe just leave it out.]</div><div><br></div><div>How about just saying "The Neuro Bureau's immediate goal" - why is there are separation between "we" and "The Neuro Bureau" - we <i>are</i> <meta charset="utf-8">The Neuro Bureau are we not?? :) </div>
<div><br></div><div>Some more suggested edits to that paragraph:</div><div><span class="Apple-style-span" style="font-family: HoeflerText-Regular, 'Hoefler Text', 'Times New Roman', serif; font-size: 14px; line-height: 17px; -webkit-text-size-adjust: none; "><br>
</span></div><div><meta charset="utf-8"><span class="Apple-style-span" style="font-family: HoeflerText-Regular, 'Hoefler Text', 'Times New Roman', serif; font-size: 14px; line-height: 17px; -webkit-text-size-adjust: none; ">The Neuro Bureau's immediate goal is to establish a forum and a platform for "open neuroscience," and to facilitate the translation of that ethos into action by </span><span class="Apple-style-span" style="font-family: HoeflerText-Regular, 'Hoefler Text', 'Times New Roman', serif; font-size: 14px; line-height: 17px; -webkit-text-size-adjust: none; ">conducting successful large open </span><span class="Apple-style-span" style="font-family: HoeflerText-Regular, 'Hoefler Text', 'Times New Roman', serif; font-size: 14px; line-height: 17px; -webkit-text-size-adjust: none; ">interdisciplinary </span><span class="Apple-style-span" style="font-family: HoeflerText-Regular, 'Hoefler Text', 'Times New Roman', serif; font-size: 14px; line-height: 17px; -webkit-text-size-adjust: none; ">collaborative efforts — such as <a title="http://neurobureau.projects.nitrc.org/ADHD200/" href="http://neurobureau.projects.nitrc.org/ADHD200/" style="color: rgb(173, 123, 18); text-decoration: none; ">releasing the preprocessed version</a> of the <a title="http://fcon_1000.projects.nitrc.org/indi/adhd200/" href="http://fcon_1000.projects.nitrc.org/indi/adhd200/" style="color: rgb(173, 123, 18); text-decoration: none; ">ADHD-200 competition dataset</a>. The <a title="http://neurobureau.projects.nitrc.org/BrainArt_back/BrainArt_back/Competition.html" href="http://neurobureau.projects.nitrc.org/BrainArt_back/BrainArt_back/Competition.html" style="color: rgb(173, 123, 18); text-decoration: none; ">Brain-Art Competition</a> is likewise an effort to bring attention to the more creative, aesthetically-oriented aspects of our field, and to publicize and encourage creative developments taking place at the nexus of art and neuroimaging.</span></div>
<meta charset="utf-8"><div><br></div><div><meta charset="utf-8"><span class="Apple-style-span" style="font-family: HoeflerText-Regular, 'Hoefler Text', 'Times New Roman', serif; font-size: 14px; line-height: 17px; -webkit-text-size-adjust: none; ">We encourage interested scientists inside and outside [<b>of</b>] the neuroimaging community, as well as artists and researchers from related fields to bring their own initiatives. Please share [this page, or] The Neuro Bureau with others you think might be interested, and... let's be open about it.</span></div>
<div>PLEASE!! get rid of the 'of' there! It's probably a US-english vs. english-english thing but i hate it when inside/outside is used in conjunction with "of"</div><div><br></div><div>On the mission statement page:</div>
<div><br></div><div><meta charset="utf-8"><span class="Apple-style-span" style="font-family: HoeflerText-Regular, 'Hoefler Text', 'Times New Roman', serif; font-size: 14px; line-height: 17px; -webkit-text-size-adjust: none; ">The following efforts provide [early] examples of how open neuroscience principles can be implemented in the neuroimaging community, [as well as in some cases] and the value of grassroots initiatives.</span></div>
<div>[delete stuff in brackets]</div><div><br></div><div><meta charset="utf-8"><span class="Apple-style-span" style="font-family: HoeflerText-Regular, 'Hoefler Text', 'Times New Roman', serif; font-size: 14px; line-height: 17px; -webkit-text-size-adjust: none; ">However, these <b>endeavors</b> are just the beginning. <b>To realize the true potential of open neuroscience, we need to alter the culture of [neuro]scientific research <span class="style_2" style="font-family: HoeflerText-Regular, 'Hoefler Text', 'Times New Roman', serif; font-size: 13px; font-style: normal; line-height: 16px; ">— i</span>n particular, we need to foster a shift towards a focus on what can be gained communally through increased collaboration, and away from a focus on what can be gained or lost at the individual level. It is only through the shared efforts of the scientific community that open neuroscience can succeed. </b></span></div>
<div>[I make this suggestion as I felt that perhaps it's a little strong to say "without regard" - are you asking too much?? perhaps toning it down a little bit will help people who see us as too extreme. like Tea partiers.]</div>
<div><br></div><div><br></div><div>Not sure if the "<span class="Apple-style-span" style="font-family: HoeflerText-Regular, 'Hoefler Text', 'Times New Roman', serif; font-size: 14px; line-height: 17px; -webkit-text-size-adjust: none; ">at stages far earlier than is common practice</span>" is necessary for point 4</div>
<div><br></div><div>In the attainment of goals part:</div><div><br></div><div><meta charset="utf-8"><span class="Apple-style-span" style="font-family: HoeflerText-Regular, 'Hoefler Text', 'Times New Roman', serif; font-size: 14px; line-height: 17px; -webkit-text-size-adjust: none; ">Efforts such as the open release of pre-processed forms of the<a title="http://neurobureau.projects.nitrc.org/ADHD200" href="http://neurobureau.projects.nitrc.org/ADHD200" style="color: rgb(173, 123, 18); text-decoration: none; ">ADHD-200 Global Competition</a> data provide an initial example of our vision.</span></div>
<div>I think you're beginning to sound a little grandiose... Perhaps just stating "The open release of pre-processed ADHD-200 Global Competition data represents a Neuro Bureau initiative that is in line with this goal."</div>
<div>Don't forget to change "computationally" to computational in that point.</div><meta charset="utf-8"><div>I can tell when Mike's had a hand in writing something because the word "initial" appears everywhere :b</div>
<div><br></div><div>It's silly, but in point 3 I would say </div><div><meta charset="utf-8"><span class="Apple-style-span" style="font-family: HoeflerText-Regular, 'Hoefler Text', 'Times New Roman', serif; font-size: 14px; line-height: 17px; -webkit-text-size-adjust: none; ">building </span><span class="Apple-style-span" style="font-family: HoeflerText-Regular, 'Hoefler Text', 'Times New Roman', serif; font-size: 14px; line-height: 17px; -webkit-text-size-adjust: none; ">relationships </span><span class="Apple-style-span" style="font-family: HoeflerText-Regular, 'Hoefler Text', 'Times New Roman', serif; font-size: 14px; line-height: 17px; -webkit-text-size-adjust: none; ">among members</span></div>
<meta charset="utf-8"><div>rather than relationship building</div><div><br></div><div>The way they're currently written, the last two points sound like goals, rather than ways to achieve the goals..</div><div><br></div>
<div><meta charset="utf-8"><span class="Apple-style-span" style="font-family: HoeflerText-Regular, 'Hoefler Text', 'Times New Roman', serif; font-size: 14px; line-height: 17px; -webkit-text-size-adjust: none; "><span class="Bullet" style="text-decoration: none; text-transform: none; border-top-style: none; border-right-style: none; border-bottom-style: none; border-left-style: none; border-width: initial; border-color: initial; font-size: 14px; ">4)</span> <b> By promoting </b>open <b>question-and-answer</b> exchanges among community members through The Neuro Bureau forums, and <b>broadcasting</b> "breaking knowledge" via <a title="http://www.nitrc.org/forum/?group_id=383" href="http://www.nitrc.org/forum/?group_id=383" style="color: rgb(173, 123, 18); text-decoration: none; ">forum exchanges</a> and social <b>media</b> (e.g., <a title="http://www.facebook.com/pages/The-Neuro-Bureau/153692997984716" href="http://www.facebook.com/pages/The-Neuro-Bureau/153692997984716" style="color: rgb(173, 123, 18); text-decoration: none; ">facebook</a>, <a title="http://twitter.com/#!/TheNeuroBureau" href="http://twitter.com/#!/TheNeuroBureau" style="color: rgb(173, 123, 18); text-decoration: none; ">twitter</a>, <a title="Blog.html" href="http://neurobureau.projects.nitrc.org/NeuroBureau/Blog.html" style="color: rgb(173, 123, 18); text-decoration: none; ">blogging</a>). [In addition, it is our hope that The Neuro Bureau can come to form a community-specific incarnation of ‘couch surfing’. - </span>Doesn't this last point fit better with number 3 and the relationship-building stuff?]</div>
<meta charset="utf-8"><meta charset="utf-8"><div><span class="Apple-style-span" style="font-family: HoeflerText-Regular, 'Hoefler Text', 'Times New Roman', serif; font-size: 14px; line-height: 17px; -webkit-text-size-adjust: none; "><br>
</span></div><div><span class="Apple-style-span" style="font-family: HoeflerText-Regular, 'Hoefler Text', 'Times New Roman', serif; font-size: 14px; line-height: 17px; -webkit-text-size-adjust: none; "><meta charset="utf-8"><span class="Bullet" style="text-decoration: none; text-transform: none; border-top-style: none; border-right-style: none; border-bottom-style: none; border-left-style: none; border-width: initial; border-color: initial; font-size: 14px; ">5)</span> <b>By increasing</b> the imaging community’s focus on the sharing of tools and media capable of innovating means of expression among neuroscientists. <b>As a first step,</b> The Neuro Bureau will be launching an annual <a title="http://neurobureau.projects.nitrc.org/BrainArt_back/BrainArt_back/Competition.html" href="http://neurobureau.projects.nitrc.org/BrainArt_back/BrainArt_back/Competition.html" style="color: rgb(173, 123, 18); text-decoration: none; ">Brain-Art Competition</a>.</span></div>
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<div>Sorry for taking so long....</div><div><br></div><div>Clare</div><div><span class="Apple-style-span" style="font-family: HoeflerText-Regular, 'Hoefler Text', 'Times New Roman', serif; font-size: 14px; line-height: 17px; -webkit-text-size-adjust: none; "><br>
</span></div><div><br><div class="gmail_quote">On Thu, Apr 21, 2011 at 11:58 AM, Clare Kelly <span dir="ltr"><<a href="mailto:amclarekelly@gmail.com">amclarekelly@gmail.com</a>></span> wrote:<br><blockquote class="gmail_quote" style="margin:0 0 0 .8ex;border-left:1px #ccc solid;padding-left:1ex;">
Being a stickler, and fairly literal, I have some comments on the letter/competition page (attached)... mainly, the way things are worded now seems to suggest that you should only submit pieces that were intend to communicate some aspect of "real" data/results.. but at the same time, the "best comical" section suggests you can submit any brain-related art... can you clarify that??<br>
<br>I'll take a look at the other pages now...<br>Clare<div><div></div><div class="h5"><br><br><div class="gmail_quote">On Thu, Apr 21, 2011 at 11:13 AM, Daniel S Margulies <span dir="ltr"><<a href="mailto:daniel.margulies@gmail.com" target="_blank">daniel.margulies@gmail.com</a>></span> wrote:<br>
<blockquote class="gmail_quote" style="margin:0 0 0 .8ex;border-left:1px #ccc solid;padding-left:1ex">Thanks Pierre, <div><br></div><div>I've made the changes you caught. We can certainly continue to tighten the text. </div>
<div><br></div><div>I just spoke with the venue, and they will be making a decision as soon as possible (but by April 28th, at the latest). As I mentioned before, we'll go live as soon as we hear the okay from them... so until then, please feel free to continue sending comments. </div>
<div><br></div><div>Until soon, </div><div>Daniel<div><div></div><div><br><br><div class="gmail_quote">On Thu, Apr 21, 2011 at 3:50 AM, Pierre Bellec <span dir="ltr"><<a href="mailto:pierre.bellec@criugm.qc.ca" target="_blank">pierre.bellec@criugm.qc.ca</a>></span> wrote:<br>
<blockquote class="gmail_quote" style="margin:0 0 0 .8ex;border-left:1px #ccc solid;padding-left:1ex">Hi everyone,<div><br></div><div>This is amazing Daniel ! I love it. A couple of minor changes : </div><div><br></div><div>
main site "<span style="font-family:HoeflerText-Regular, 'Hoefler Text', 'Times New Roman', serif;font-size:14px;line-height:17px"> embracing the concepts <font color="#FF0000">of</font> data, methods, and ideas sharing." </span></div>
<div><span style="font-family:HoeflerText-Regular, 'Hoefler Text', 'Times New Roman', serif;font-size:14px;line-height:17px"><br></span></div>
<div><span style="font-family:HoeflerText-Regular, 'Hoefler Text', 'Times New Roman', serif;font-size:14px;line-height:17px">manifesto "</span><span style="font-family:HoeflerText-Regular, 'Hoefler Text', 'Times New Roman', serif;font-size:14px;line-height:17px">Whether it be large computational resources, analytically advanced algorithms or domain specific knowledge, The Neuro Bureau will actively encourage unrestricted sharing among its members, "</span></div>
<div><font face="HoeflerText-Regular, 'Hoefler Text', 'Times New Roman', serif"><span style="font-size:14px;line-height:17px"><br>
</span></font></div><div><span style="font-family:HoeflerText-Regular, 'Hoefler Text', 'Times New Roman', serif;font-size:14px;line-height:17px">I may try to get the manifesto a bit crisper (even though it is really already good the way it is, it certainly deserves an extreme level of care), and come up with a draft of "credits" page for the ADHD200 competition. But this can wait. As far as I am concerned the site is ready to go public. </span></div>
<div><span style="font-family:HoeflerText-Regular, 'Hoefler Text', 'Times New Roman', serif;font-size:14px;line-height:17px"><br></span></div>
<div><font face="HoeflerText-Regular, 'Hoefler Text', 'Times New Roman', serif"><span style="font-size:14px;line-height:17px">Bravo,</span></font></div>
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</span></font></div><div>Pierre<div><div></div><div><div><br></div><br>
<br><br><div class="gmail_quote"><a href="tel:2011%2F4%2F20" value="+492011420" target="_blank">2011/4/20</a> Daniel S Margulies <span dir="ltr"><<a href="mailto:daniel.margulies@gmail.com" target="_blank">daniel.margulies@gmail.com</a>></span><br>
<blockquote class="gmail_quote" style="margin:0 0 0 .8ex;border-left:1px #ccc solid;padding-left:1ex">
Thanks Maarten, <div>Made the change, and consider yourself an official organizer.</div><div><br></div><div><font color="#888888">Daniel<br><br></font><div class="gmail_quote"><div>On Wed, Apr 20, 2011 at 9:48 PM, Maarten Mennes <span dir="ltr"><<a href="mailto:mennes.maarten@gmail.com" target="_blank">mennes.maarten@gmail.com</a>></span> wrote:<br>
</div><div><div></div><div><blockquote class="gmail_quote" style="margin:0 0 0 .8ex;border-left:1px #ccc solid;padding-left:1ex">LOVE IT!<br>
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Well done!<br>
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- there is a typo in this sentence - there is a 'the' too much: We<br>
recommend a minimum of at least 300 dots per inch, and the suggest the<br>
following file<br>
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I would also be glad to help organizing/setting up the<br>
expo/judging/making pictures...<br>
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Maarten<br>
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On Wed, Apr 20, 2011 at 3:01 PM, Daniel S Margulies<br>
<<a href="mailto:daniel.margulies@gmail.com" target="_blank">daniel.margulies@gmail.com</a>> wrote:<br>
> Dear Hubs and Mike,<br>
> As you've all seen by now, a lot has happened this week. The ADHD-200<br>
> preprocessed data is circulating nicely, with 220 visits to the site, and 7<br>
> complete (and ~140 partial) downloads...<br>
> When Mike was in Berlin last week we had a creative evening together and<br>
> decided to launch a Brain-Art competition as the centerpiece of our party at<br>
> HBM this summer. The private URL is below, and we plan to make the site live<br>
> as soon as we receive the official contract from the venue. Ideally, we'll<br>
> launch tomorrow with posts on all the list-serves tomorrow morning<br>
> (Thursday), just before Easter weekend. With that in mind, we would<br>
> appreciate if you could please check the following hidden links and enclosed<br>
> text for any ideas/corrections/comments as soon as possible. As always,<br>
> apologies for the last-minute request, but this has all come together very<br>
> quickly, and we'd like to launch soon. Please send comments by today, if<br>
> possible. And if you need more time, just let me know...<br>
> Yours in neurobureaucracy,<br>
> Daniel & Cameron<br>
> 1. The Brain-Art Competition:<br>
> <a href="http://neurobureau.projects.nitrc.org/BrainArt_back/Competition.html" target="_blank">http://neurobureau.projects.nitrc.org/BrainArt_back/Competition.html</a><br>
> 2. The Main website:<br>
> <a href="http://neurobureau.projects.nitrc.org/NeuroBureau/Welcome.html" target="_blank">http://neurobureau.projects.nitrc.org/NeuroBureau/Welcome.html</a><br>
> !!! Please check the Mission Statement page !!!<br>
> 3. The Blog is now setup at:<br>
> <a href="http://theneurobureau.tumblr.com/" target="_blank">http://theneurobureau.tumblr.com/</a><br>
> It will automatically feed to the Main page... Please let me know if you are<br>
> interested in blogging, and I'll send you the username and password...<br>
><br>
> In addition:<br>
> 4. We also have the twitter handle: @theneurobureau<br>
> 5. And we still have the facebook page:<br>
> <a href="http://www.facebook.com/pages/The-Neuro-Bureau/153692997984716" target="_blank">http://www.facebook.com/pages/The-Neuro-Bureau/153692997984716</a><br>
> (a lot more complicated, I know)<br>
><br>
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